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The Foolishness of Kekoa

April 6, 2021 by Spring Writing Contest 2021 100 Comments

This story is by Neku Onoja and was part of our 2021 Spring Writing Contest. You can find all the writing contest stories here.

All alone with nothing left, Kekoa, the brave one who nearly escaped and also escaped being eaten by the piranhas. He is forced to go on a terrible journey as a punishment for his stubbornness, but before we get to that let’s step back in time to see how all of this happened.

In a small village somewhere located on an island where it is known for its peace and unity with the people, but not everyone thought of the village this way because they were jealous of a prince called Kekoa. He is not only the heir to the throne, but he is also a spoiled child. Who is believed to bring destruction rather than peace to the village? Well, at least what they think.

One instance that proves his demise is when he was walking in the market one day as people looked with both fear and disgust, as Kekoa stopped and looked around with a smirk. As soon as he smirks, everyone disappears but his next victim. As he approaches his next victim, shaking in fear, he opens his mouth. His teeth are that of a shark, and from his throat to his mouth came a glowing bright light which was sucking the soul out of his victim, every single drop out of him.

‘Ha!’ rejoiced Kekoa. ‘Now who could dare stop me now, for yet I have another victim and there is no one here who can stop me. Hahaha!’

Rejoicing like he is invincible, unknowingly to him, the angels heard of this and had enough. They went to tell God of his doing before he would torture more innocent people’s souls.

‘Ancient One!’ exclaimed Angel Micheal.

‘What is it, Angel Michael?’ asked God.

‘Father, it is Kekoa. He…’ explained Michael.

‘I know.’ God interrupted, with a look on his face.

‘So what do we do Father?’ asked Micheal.

‘I shall go down there and talk to him myself.’ replied God.

‘But Father…’ complained Michael.

‘Do not worry, for he is my child whom I shall not touch or harm, but I shall punish him for his selfishness.’ explained God. ‘Now that we know the plan, we shall go.’ 

‘Yes, King!’ exclaimed both angels.

’Open the gate!’ God commanded.

As the gates of heaven opened under His command, and as the angel prepared with their weapons and armor, which then went through the gate which led to heaven. As they arrived, the Earth began to shake like that of an earthquake, the animals hiding in fear as they heard the footsteps of the Lord getting bigger. Even the birds scatter into the air as they feel his presence. The village people too could feel His presence and fled to hide, but the Lord only came for Seiko.

‘Prince Kekoa, why hath thou hiding from me?’ God questioned.

‘My, my, my Lord!’ Prince Kekoa exclaimed. ‘I have not forsaken thee, my Lord.’

‘Then why are you torturing and killing innocent blood?’ God commanded.

‘I, I…’ Prince Kekoa stammered, putting his head down in shame.

‘For you have not changed Kekoa, and as for I shall punish for eternity.’ God decided.

‘No my Lord! Anything but eternal punishment, I beg of you.’ pleaded Prince Kekoa.

‘You should have thought of that before killing my people. As from now on, as part of your punishment, you shall not be human anymore, for I shall turn into a werewolf who shall wander into the wilderness of the Forbidden Forest for eternity, and you will not eat or drink as you do your punishment.’ God demanded.

Just as God commanded, his body began to change, his hands and legs turn into a werewolf, his ears as long and hairy like a werewolf, his nose long and wet, his teeth sharp and long, his eyes glowing as bright as a star, his face, and body full of hair. Looking with despair and shame, he could not carry all these burdens. So decided to lighten the burden he carries.

‘I know all this burden may seem too much for you, but since you are still my child, I shall let no one nor nothing to harm you for you is anointed.’ God explained.’ Now go, and begone from me, and face your punishment.’ 

‘Yes, my Lord.’ Prince Kekoa obeyed, as he proceeded into the Forbidden forest.

‘My Lord, why did you not just kill him and get over with it?’ Angel Michael asked.

‘Why would I? For he is still one of my children, and I love all my children whether bad or good, I still love them especially when they seem to be non-perfect.’ explained God.

‘But Abba. Kekoa has killed so many people, why do you forgive so easily when the cries of the innocent people are pleading for mercy?’ Angel Micheal questioned.

‘I am aware of the people he killed, but he is still my child and I still love him. Now is there anything you still want me to explain?’ God asked.

‘No…’ replied Angel Michael.

‘Look.’ God said, as he put his hand on his shoulder.’I know you are angry, and you have every right to be, but that is my child, and deserves to live, for it is not yet his time to die.’ God explained.

‘Alright, Father. For I trust you and have no right to doubt you because you always tell the truth and everything you say always has a reason for it.’ Angel Michael obeyed.

So God and Angel Michael prepared to go back to heaven, while Kekoa, who is a werewolf, began to wander in the forest: hoping to please God, but when he thought he could he found two creatures who looked like mermaids only this time they had legs. 

Note the conversation going on is between Keiko and Seiko. Seiko is the first to speak followed by Keiko.

‘Well hello there,’ said one of the mermaids ‘Are you lost little one? If you are you could come with us.’

‘Stop it, Keiko.’ 

‘Why Seiko? You always love to spoil the fun. Hmph.’ 

‘Well because this is an anointed one, and we are not allowed to touch.’ 

‘You mean..’ 

‘Yes, he’s one of them, besides no normal person would come here unless they have a reason too.’ 

‘Well, I guess that explains it. Come on Seiko, let’s get out of here.’ 

‘Hold on!’

‘What?’ 

‘He looks lost shouldn’t we help him.’

‘What?! Are you crazy? Do you know He belongs to God, and we are not allowed to touch him or go near him for whatever reason at all?’ 

‘I know already, but we still have to help him.’ 

‘Oh please. Don’t you remember when God abandoned us when we needed Him most?’

‘Abandoned? He didn’t abandon us, we betrayed Him, remember. We fell for the devil’s trap and it disappointed Him a lot, but we still have a chance to change and go back to Him.’

‘But what if He doesn’t want us back?’

‘Well, I hope that won’t happen.’

‘See! Even if you are not sure about it how do you know?’

‘Because He is a good God who will always be there for us, for He loves us. Now come on, let’s go.’

As Kekoa watched the interaction between these two creatures, he noticed something about Seiko which he never knew before. He saw the humility and loyalty in which Keiko showed how much she loved God by displaying just how much she really loves God. All this left him speechless and made him realize he needed to drop his pride, so he could change to please both himself and God.

Kekoa knew he could not do this alone, so he decided to ask for Keiko and Seiko’s help, but to tell them because he could not talk which was part of the punishment he got as a werewolf. So now he knew he was doomed for he did not know any other way to tell him, so in order to get their action, he decided to act like a werewolf.

‘What is it? You can’t talk because it is part of your punishment for pride and selfishness isn’t it? Oh wow, that’s sad, but you want to make it up to God by restoring yourself.’ Seiko interpreted.

‘Wow! That’s a lot to understand for an animal interpreter.’ Keiko exclaims.

‘While thanking you.’ Seiko replied, sarcastically. 

They both looked at each other and just laughed. This made Kekoa’s heart filled with warmth, for he has never had this feeling for a while. Just when everything seemed to be perfect, the ground began to shake and the ground opened which swallowed but Keiko and Seiko. Kekoa left alone ran and ran thinking he escaped only to be found in the river where the piranhas were eating him alive.

Kekoa tried to fight so much and struggled, but luckily for him, he managed to survive his death as God promised. Left all alone, Kekoa was left to walk all alone in despair, and continue to go on his journey on his own, for he has learned the consequences of his actions. What will happen next? Who will be his next helper? Are Keiko and Seiko still alive? These questions are to be answered in the next story.

 

Filed Under: 2021 Spring Writing Contest

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Comments

  1. Mary says

    April 6, 2021 at 6:48 pm

    I just can’t wait to read what happens next

    Reply
  2. Olaoluwa says

    April 6, 2021 at 7:00 pm

    A really intriguing piece!

    Reply
  3. Ben says

    April 6, 2021 at 7:38 pm

    GOD’s Mercies…quite interesting

    Reply
  4. Blessing says

    April 7, 2021 at 2:06 am

    Wow very interesting and captivating

    Reply
    • Emmanuel Nyipira says

      April 7, 2021 at 9:18 am

      Your potential for story telling is quite remarkable. Keep it up

      Reply
  5. Abosede Grace Oyishoma says

    April 7, 2021 at 2:31 am

    Interestingly we enjoy God’s mercy and we don’t see it.Welldone Neku..

    Reply
  6. Christianah Abosede Akindolie says

    April 7, 2021 at 3:45 am

    Thought provoking story. This shows the character of God…ever loving and merciful. Well done Neku!

    Reply
  7. Mukhtar Mohammed Musa says

    April 7, 2021 at 3:52 am

    Good job Neku, you are doing well…..keep it up. We proud of you.

    Reply
  8. ALOZIE ORJI says

    April 7, 2021 at 4:30 am

    Good job from a good ambassador, keep getting better.

    Reply
  9. Ibrahim says

    April 7, 2021 at 4:31 am

    A nice read.

    Reply
    • Esther Jimoh says

      April 10, 2021 at 5:08 am

      Wow, interesting read. Great imagination and writing skills. Wsy to go girl!
      Here we see the mercy and forgiving nature of God.

      Reply
  10. Victoria Maji says

    April 7, 2021 at 7:33 am

    Interesting! What happens next? Can’t wait to read. Well done Neku

    Reply
  11. Ola Bero says

    April 7, 2021 at 8:00 am

    Beautiful story,well done to you.

    Reply
  12. Grace Samuel says

    April 7, 2021 at 8:21 am

    Waiting expectantly for the next story. Great job Neku

    Reply
  13. John says

    April 7, 2021 at 8:53 am

    Beautiful read, insightful

    Reply
  14. Abdullahi Tsadu says

    April 7, 2021 at 9:04 am

    You have impressive writing skills Neku. With this attribute, i’m optimistic that you’d soon become an exceptional writer of international repute

    Reply
  15. Bilhatu Haruna Sani says

    April 7, 2021 at 11:23 am

    Wow what a merciful and compassionate God. I can’t wait for the next story.

    Reply
  16. Daniel Anthony says

    April 7, 2021 at 1:16 pm

    Kekoa received punishment that is worst than death. For he was converted to a werewolf, though he was a Prince.
    So interesting, I can’t wait for the next part.

    Reply
  17. George Odiong says

    April 7, 2021 at 11:38 pm

    A story teller in the house. Just awesome

    Reply
  18. Christiana Amuta says

    April 8, 2021 at 5:12 am

    Am proud of you girl. Waiting to see how it all ends.

    Reply
  19. Abimaje Moses says

    April 8, 2021 at 5:15 am

    Beautiful piece

    Reply
  20. Angela says

    April 8, 2021 at 5:17 am

    Weldone Neku. You definitely have good potentials at writing stories. The lessons were clear and you kept us eagerly anticipating the next move. I wish you God’s help as you explore this potential in you.

    Reply
  21. Josiah says

    April 8, 2021 at 5:25 am

    I love the suspense, it’s been long I read something like this i’m grateful I did waiting for the unanswered questions to be answered.

    Reply
  22. Oyindamola Taiwo says

    April 8, 2021 at 5:29 am

    I love this write up can’t wait to see it on the stand

    Reply
  23. Cyril Obiefuna says

    April 8, 2021 at 5:30 am

    Very interesting! There is consequence for every action… I can’t wait for the next part.

    Reply
  24. TeeMeeNorth says

    April 8, 2021 at 6:06 am

    Beautiful story I must say

    Reply
    • Karick Joseph says

      April 8, 2021 at 12:04 pm

      Interesting piece ❤️

      Reply
  25. Ocholi Aruwa says

    April 8, 2021 at 8:40 am

    Beautiful!

    Reply
  26. George A. Ugbong says

    April 8, 2021 at 3:32 pm

    A beautiful piece!

    Reply
  27. Alex O. says

    April 8, 2021 at 4:14 pm

    Great idea and a strong imagination displayed here!

    Reply
  28. Binta says

    April 8, 2021 at 5:15 pm

    Nice piece

    Reply
  29. Istifanus Kasa says

    April 8, 2021 at 5:59 pm

    Intriguing!!

    Reply
  30. Vese Katsarov says

    April 9, 2021 at 12:03 am

    Interesting story, You did well Neku, ,!!!
    Make sure that story can touch lot of people.
    Waiting for next.

    Reply
  31. Dookaan Bem says

    April 9, 2021 at 3:53 am

    Interesting piece.

    Reply
    • Medina Dauda says

      April 11, 2021 at 4:53 am

      Beautiful piece. Keep it up Neku Onoja

      Reply
  32. Frederick o Abah says

    April 9, 2021 at 3:56 am

    A great piece of work. I love the imagination Neku.

    Reply
  33. Udofa Anthony says

    April 9, 2021 at 4:05 am

    Keep up the good work

    Reply
  34. Simon says

    April 9, 2021 at 4:11 am

    Wow. Brilliantly amazing and interesting. Here you go girl. We will win. More breakthroughs.

    Reply
  35. Oyebanji Oluwatomi Adeoye says

    April 9, 2021 at 4:16 am

    The story is thoughtful and highly inspiring. Great master piece. Looking forward to the next edition. God bless you and make you more excellent.

    Reply
  36. Charity Jefia says

    April 9, 2021 at 4:40 am

    Wow!!! Can’t wait to read the next. Well done Neku

    Reply
  37. Amina says

    April 9, 2021 at 5:11 am

    Beautiful. Nicely done. Looking forward to the next one

    Reply
  38. gracious says

    April 9, 2021 at 5:27 am

    Nice 1 neku
    Next pls…..

    Reply
  39. Victoria Paul Anyu says

    April 9, 2021 at 5:43 am

    This is beautiful . Weldon dear,

    Reply
  40. BULUS MUSA says

    April 9, 2021 at 6:30 am

    Nice and well written story. Keep it up

    Reply
  41. Ezeh Tochukwu y says

    April 9, 2021 at 6:33 am

    Nice one

    Reply
  42. Ojodale says

    April 9, 2021 at 8:29 am

    A great piece. Well done, Neku!

    Reply
    • Kolawole Temidayo says

      April 9, 2021 at 6:32 pm

      Interesting… Am definitely ready again and again

      Reply
  43. Gloria Israel says

    April 9, 2021 at 10:22 am

    Wow! Very intriguing.

    Thumbs up Neku!

    Reply
  44. Emmanuel Ogala says

    April 9, 2021 at 10:29 am

    Wow this is interesting.pls when is the next part coming can’t wait

    Reply
  45. Esther Kuyoro says

    April 9, 2021 at 10:53 am

    Great job girl! Greater heights in Jesus’ name

    Reply
  46. Collins says

    April 9, 2021 at 4:30 pm

    Very interesting , nice work

    Reply
  47. Richard says

    April 9, 2021 at 5:15 pm

    Wow this is so amazing, you have a great and creative mind, I love the way you started your story.

    Reply
  48. Oby says

    April 9, 2021 at 5:26 pm

    Well it’s good

    Reply
  49. Patrick Ugbeikwu says

    April 9, 2021 at 5:26 pm

    This is so good to read. Interesting.

    Reply
  50. Obije Mercy says

    April 9, 2021 at 5:28 pm

    Twas worth the read.
    Nice one Neku
    Well done

    Reply
  51. Oby says

    April 9, 2021 at 5:34 pm

    Nice one
    Learnt some things

    Reply
  52. Prince Nathaniel says

    April 9, 2021 at 5:53 pm

    Woww

    Reply
  53. Ebere says

    April 9, 2021 at 5:53 pm

    So interesting I can’t wait to read it all

    Reply
  54. Obed nwodafe says

    April 9, 2021 at 6:01 pm

    Fantastic. It’s a great one

    Reply
  55. Helen says

    April 9, 2021 at 6:18 pm

    Very detailed… Beautiful

    Reply
  56. Bimbo says

    April 9, 2021 at 6:19 pm

    Quite intriguing and suspense packed.

    Reply
  57. Queen says

    April 9, 2021 at 6:50 pm

    Interesting Story… Beautiful

    Reply
  58. ROSELINE J. Omilabu says

    April 9, 2021 at 8:50 pm

    Lovely piece of writing Uneku! Explaining the love of God to his creations is so beautiful . God bless you dear.

    Reply
  59. Udochukwu says

    April 9, 2021 at 10:44 pm

    This is so lovely

    Reply
  60. chogu says

    April 10, 2021 at 2:31 am

    Wow! Nice one

    Reply
  61. Gideon Harry says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:30 am

    My God this piece is divinely inspired, more of God’s inspiration sir,to keep writing to the glory of his name.

    Reply
  62. Delight says

    April 10, 2021 at 6:53 am

    Good very, work good

    Reply
  63. Funke Timothy says

    April 10, 2021 at 7:03 am

    Good job Neku! What an interesting story.

    Reply
  64. AGABA FIDELIS says

    April 10, 2021 at 8:30 am

    Nice one

    Reply
  65. Christo says

    April 10, 2021 at 8:47 am

    Wow this is nice

    Reply
  66. Naomi says

    April 10, 2021 at 10:10 am

    Job well done

    Reply
  67. Fred Aaron says

    April 10, 2021 at 10:28 am

    A nice piece

    Reply
  68. Noah Maji says

    April 10, 2021 at 12:01 pm

    Very intriguing!!!

    Reply
  69. Lois says

    April 10, 2021 at 2:55 pm

    I love your work
    Nice work

    Reply
  70. Sarah says

    April 10, 2021 at 3:39 pm

    Nice now neku, keep up the good work

    Reply
  71. Blessing says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:31 pm

    So lovely nice work

    Reply
  72. Kelvin says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:41 pm

    Perfect,so nice

    Reply
  73. Peter says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:42 pm

    Perfectly ok no mistake

    Reply
  74. Peace says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:45 pm

    We need people like in writing. You so good

    Reply
  75. Abu says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:47 pm

    More strength and knowledge dr

    Reply
  76. Henry says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:49 pm

    Keep up the good work

    Reply
  77. Barnaba says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:51 pm

    People need to read this and learn from it

    Reply
  78. Oche says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:52 pm

    I love it nice work

    Reply
  79. Sat says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:55 pm

    Ohh very good

    Reply
  80. Dag says

    April 10, 2021 at 4:57 pm

    Very good work dr neku my neku

    Reply
  81. Makop says

    April 10, 2021 at 5:00 pm

    Your hands are bless dr

    Reply
  82. Angel Onega says

    April 11, 2021 at 2:04 am

    All the best, always find strength in the lord

    Reply
  83. Emmanuel says

    April 11, 2021 at 2:54 pm

    Fantastic

    Reply
  84. Moshé says

    April 11, 2021 at 4:10 pm

    Next Chimamanda warming up. Kudos Neku

    Reply
  85. Theresa Moses says

    April 11, 2021 at 5:01 pm

    Beautiful write up. Success all the way

    Reply
  86. Sunday Isaiah says

    April 11, 2021 at 6:57 pm

    waooo I am proud of u hoping to see u come out with flying g colours

    Reply
  87. Caleb says

    April 12, 2021 at 3:18 am

    This is not a piece you get to read everyday, a rare piece. It’s an incandescent story. Bless up cousin

    Reply
    • David says

      April 12, 2021 at 4:49 am

      Woa, this is lit, an awesome piece anticipating for more. Kudos couz!!!

      Reply
  88. Osochi says

    April 12, 2021 at 4:44 am

    This is a very dynamic story
    I loved it

    Reply
  89. Esther says

    April 12, 2021 at 5:12 am

    Nice one

    Reply
  90. Shadipe Dolapo says

    April 12, 2021 at 6:04 am

    Amazing story Keku. Thumbs up

    Reply
  91. Anne Iyela says

    April 12, 2021 at 6:51 am

    Interesting… excited about kekoas next adventure

    Reply
  92. Henry says

    April 12, 2021 at 7:17 am

    Wow this is great

    Reply
  93. Okoye Ugochukwu says

    April 12, 2021 at 7:24 am

    Nice work

    Reply
  94. Solace says

    April 12, 2021 at 7:35 am

    Very interesting story

    Reply

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