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Going Away

November 27, 2017 by Phil Town 8 Comments

Going Away

A bustling hall: men in their standard tight, grey suits with high collars on the jackets and pencil-thin ties, women flaunting the elegant gowns they’ve bought for the occasion. The vibrant colours of the gowns glitter and gleam in the light from the grand chandeliers that hang low from the ornate ceiling.

Here and there small groups have formed. A constant flow of people, flutes of champagne in their immaculately manicured hands, enter and leave through side doors, looking for friends or groups to attach to.

Gentle music wafts through the room from a string quartet, discreetly positioned in a corner. It’s little more than background to the steady hum of conversation, punctuated by bursts of laughter.

The “chink-chink” of spoon on wine glass.

The music comes to an abrupt halt. The hall falls silent, everyone turning their attention to the centre and a frail-looking, middle-aged woman, supported by a tall man of similar age. People come in from other rooms; the circle that has formed around the couple becomes tighter as the room continues to fill.

“Friends …” the woman begins weakly.

“Romans and countrymen!” A man’s voice from the back of the now-crowded hall.

Laughter and a hubbub of chatter.

The woman chinks the glass again for silence.

“Very good, Alexander! You will miss my cues for your jokes.”

More laughter.

“My friends, and dear James.” She turns to the man next to her and squeezes his arm. “I thank you so much for coming this evening. I cannot tell you how happy it makes me.” Her ashen face seems to belie her words.

“And I thank you all for your friendship over the years. My lovely sister Constance,” she points to an older woman at the front of the ring, dressed in a scarlet gown and wearing a large diamond necklace, “Alexander and Frederick, Samantha … everyone.”

“Do not go yet awhile, Agnes!” a woman’s voice this time, from another part of the room.

“Thank you, Verity, but we all know why we are here,” Agnes continues. “As you are aware, I have not been well — what the news-sites would term ‘a prolonged illness’. Let us call it by its name: I have cancro, and it has found its way to my brain. My doctors say it is inoperable. In a matter of weeks, I would not be the Agnes you know, and within one or two months…”

She wobbles slightly where she stands; James puts an arm around her shoulders.

“Thank you, my darling,” she whispers to him, then addresses the audience once more.

“I have been asking myself how — when we have been able to design a mainframe the size of a fingernail, and put a colony on Mars — how we cannot find a cure for cancro. It is one of the sad wonders of our times.”

A murmur of agreement.

“But that is the way it is; I can only accept it. So, my friends, the time has come to take my leave of you. Be assured that I go willingly, and happily. And now, a chair, please.”

A chair is produced through the ring of people; Agnes sits, with James’ help. He fishes in his pocket and pulls out a small ivory box, from which he takes a tiny red capsule. He hands it to Agnes, who drops it into her champagne. It bubbles and fizzes for a few moments. Agnes raises the glass to the crowd.

“May Madiba bless you all. Farewell.”

She pauses for one last moment, smiles at James and downs the drink in one.

The crowd breaks into song: “Bon voyage! Bon voyage! Bon voyage!”

The smile is still on Agnes’ face as, accompanied by the singing and now applause, her eyes flicker closed and her body goes limp. James lifts her up gently in his arms and carries her out of the hall, the crowd separating as they pass.

“That was a lovely moment, was it not?” a woman remarks to a friend as they head for the balcony.

“It was. And it has been a wonderful party. Will you be at Fiona’s going-away tomorrow?”

“Oh, yes. I am looking forward to it.”

Behind them, the party is already in full swing again.

Filed Under: Drama, Hot

About Phil Town

Phil is a teacher (of English as a foreign language) and translator (Portuguese > English) in Lisbon. In his spare time he writes screenplays (features and shorts) and short stories; he’s a regular contributor to Short Fiction Break. He also writes about Portuguese football (soccer) for the British independent football magazine When Saturday Comes.

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Comments

  1. Mary Kay says

    November 27, 2017 at 8:58 pm

    Loved your story. You are a great writer!

    Reply
    • Phil Town says

      November 28, 2017 at 2:36 pm

      Thanks for reading, Mary, and for your very kind comment.

      Reply
  2. Sherrie L. Stewart says

    November 29, 2017 at 7:27 am

    Phil, you have given us a sensitive, well-written story with an important premise. We should celebrate a friend’s ‘going away’ rather than mourn it.
    Your story also raises the question of choice. Choosing when, where, and how we die is the ultimate expression of free will. Agnes’s futuristic society allows that freedom of expression.
    Your detailed description of the party draws us in, we empathize with Agnes, and the final lines of dialogue provide the epiphany. Well done.
    — Sherrie

    Reply
    • Phil Town says

      November 29, 2017 at 9:50 am

      Thanks for your kind words, Sherrie.

      There’s fierce debate these days about the desirability/legality of assisted suicide in exceptional cases. I read that the Australian state of Victoria has just legalized euthanasia for the terminally ill. I have no doubt that my scene – or something similar – will be commonplace in the not-too-distant future.

      Reply
  3. Sipho Sithole says

    September 26, 2018 at 1:11 am

    Hi Phil
    Excellent piece of writing. This was more than just a story, it was a movie to me. I visualised every scene in this story.

    Reply
    • Phil Town says

      September 26, 2018 at 4:37 am

      Thanks for that, Sipho. Very glad you liked it.

      Reply
  4. Joyce Grace says

    October 25, 2021 at 7:01 pm

    So well written in such a short story.

    Reply
    • Phil Town says

      October 27, 2021 at 5:34 am

      Thanks very much, Joyce!

      Reply

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